This week I'm branching out a little and posting the opening lines from the first draft of my SEKRIT PROJECT. Consider that your warning, this isn't perfect yet. The story is written from the POV of the notorious super villain Doctor Charm.
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Don’t get me wrong, the sex was always perfect. I knew from the first time I saw my wife that I wanted her naked. Seven minutes later I wanted revenge on her for wrecking my lab, and destroying my chance for world domination in 2008. But after my arm healed, and I stole some new equipment, and had the minion cloning program back in place I felt a little different.
I wanted revenge with a side-order of naked.
He's a bit pretty (I wonder if I should post a picture of Gabriel...)
ReplyDeleteI do like this opening. I'm about halfway through my read-through and enjoying it immensely.
I absolutely love this opener. This may be the bad guy, but oh I like him a lot. Wonderful six and I definitely want more of your Sekrit Project. :)
ReplyDeleteminion cloning! revenge with a side order of naked! Love it!
ReplyDeleteomg I loved this snippet!
ReplyDeleteAwesome excerpt. I was hooked right away. :)
ReplyDeleteThat is utterly perfect.
ReplyDeleteGreat opening! I want more!
ReplyDeleteLOL. I Love this! Great job!
ReplyDeleteI always wondered what went through super-villains' heads. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteLOL.
ReplyDeleteOMG, love the "side of naked."
some fantastic thoughts here. I loved every word in the super villain's mind. And yes, minion clones and revenger with side order of naked, it doesnt get any better.
ReplyDeletewhat a fun read, world dominion, lol. Great! So little info about on the Sekrit Project, can't wait for it to go live to solve the big 'ol mystery
ReplyDeleteHa! Sounds like an awesome, unique relationship. I'd love to read more about Doctor Charm.
ReplyDeletedr. charm ? Side order of naked - LMAO - excellent
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like such a fun story!
ReplyDeleteThat was awesomely amusing!
ReplyDeleteVery strong start. Love the concept--a charming super villian.
ReplyDeleteSuper hook. Loved the description, the concept, the character's strong voice, the whole shebang.
ReplyDeleteLove the villians name-Doctor Charm.
ReplyDeleteGreat start and bring more on.
Loved these six!
ReplyDeleteTheirs is sure to be a unique relationship! Great six.
ReplyDeleteLove the last sentence!!! It's brilliant. And I love a good villian. Especially one name Dr. Charm.
ReplyDeleteLOL this was hilarious! Great opening hook and funny inner dialog. Great six.
ReplyDeleteI'd always heard revenge was best served cold. Now I find out it, it's best served naked. You hooked me. I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteLOL. This is awesome!!
ReplyDeleteOh, wow. This was perfect! LOL
ReplyDeleteFunny and cool! Ya gotta love a super villian with a sense of humor--and so resourceful. It sounds like he's met his match if she broke his arm, trashed his lab and he still wants her naked!
ReplyDeleteAwesome...would definitely keep reading.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely LOVE the voice! Can't wait to see how he charms her back. Super six.
ReplyDeleteWhat fun! Very enticing snippet! Makes me want to read more! Sometimes I wish that all I had to do was read and write. . .life would be perfect.
ReplyDeleteWow, that must have been some seven minutes! Lots of things I'd like to know from that.
ReplyDeleteWhat a crazy, fun opening. So much packed into those few sentences. And I love the pic, too. Smoooooth.
ReplyDeleteSimply awesome! I like his villianess already!
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