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Saturday, April 23, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - The Fight


Evan doesn't have everything he wants. Giving up his life as Doctor Charm (author of the Villain's Diary) and become a dedicated stay-at-home-Dad so his wife can return to life as the superhero Zephyr Girl isn't all soap operas and bonbons. There are days being at home is the hardest job in the world. This is one of those days:

"Mommy's in a fight!"
Picking up Maria so he could claim a spot on the couch Evan watched as Zephyr Girl whipped around a giant lizard thing, the unholy offspring of Barney the Dinosaur and Godzilla. Zephyr Girl darted in, pulling a trip wire past the reptilian legs, and dodged a heavy fist.
His heart skipped a beat. Zephyr Girl didn't move fast enough and she bounced off a building, her neck snapping back with an audible crack.
"Mom!"
The project page for this WIP has been updated so you can catch up with all the snippets, pictures, and costumes. Go check up with your favorite super villain HERE.

Please read the other Six Sunday entries here.

If you’d like to join in, the rules are simple:

  1. pick a project – a current Work in Progress, contracted work or even something readers can buy if you’re published
  2. pick six sentences
  3. post ‘em on Sunday
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32 comments:

  1. Wow, maybe her son shouldn't have been watching that. I'm sure that will be traumatic for him. I hope she's okay in real life.

    Love your descriptions of the show. They're very playful.

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  2. What you've posted from this story has been amazing so far. Great action descriptions. Maybe we could get a hint more of emotion so we can feel what he should be feeling?? Just a thought, but then I just remembered this is only 6 and you may have that already! LOL

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  3. I love your excerpts for this story. I would love to buy it. Is it available?

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  4. Jessica - That's what Dad decides to. The TV goes off while Mom battles monsters.

    Kathleen - Most the emotion is in the next few sentences, and this is still an early draft. I'll make sure it comes through in the end.

    Rebecca - I love you for saying that! This isn't out yet. It's not even 100% finished yet. But I'm planning to submit it the Samhain Superhero anthology this fall. If that doesn't work I'll shop it around and see what feedback I get. :o)

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  5. oh, very nice! Hope you get it pubbed soon!

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  6. This is wonderful. I hope she bounces right back up so her kids see that. Caught my breath on the last line.

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  7. I love that he has to stay at home with the kids while she gets to go out and be a superhero.

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  8. Sounds like an interesting twist on the superhero theme! Great six, Liana.

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  9. Love the role reversal in this one. (I would, huh? LOL) Love the original situation and ideas behind this one. Hope to read more of it.

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  10. Reminds of of Mr. Mom. When will it be available.

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  11. This is a wonderful scene to establish what life is like, and possibly also be an incident that spurs the rest of the action. Does formerly evil Dad have to go out and rescue supermom? Great stuff!!

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  12. Lindsay - Not for a while yet.

    Jessica - I can't tell! That might ruin the ending!

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  13. Yikes! Am hoping the kid's seen enough of these kinds of scenes that she isn't traumatized for life. Dad had a tough job, too, it seems. Fascinating situation and world you've created here!

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  14. Can't wait the read the entire thing once it's published. This is such a fun story and the scenes and details hook you right in.

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  15. Fun six! I love writing superheroes.

    All my best,
    Allure Van Sanz

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  16. Oh wow! Those kids are gonna grow up with some unusual childhood trauma. XD

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  17. Very creative. But the poor little guy! Hope the Mom is ok

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  18. Can't get my head around evil villain as stay-at-home Dad! Great twist. But I hope SuperMom's okay! Loved the six.

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  19. Hadn't heard of Six Sentence Sunday until seeing it on your blog. Going to have to try this next week!

    Scott

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  20. Fun. I can picture the scene in my mind.

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  21. Interesting - unique combo of characters and plot line

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  22. This is a unique twist on good versus evil. Hope Mom's not seriously injured!

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  23. That's a very heart-pounding way to end the six, and the kid adds poignancy.

    I can't wait until you finish this story. I've been very hooked just by these snippets.

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  24. Ouch! That has got to hurt. Love the action here!

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  25. I always wondered what would happen if a superhero/ine had a 'normal' family at home.

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  26. Pippa Jay - The answer is, "Nothing good." :o)

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  27. :-O

    WHat an evil place to end the snippet ;)

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